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my poem #2

June 7, 2009

tell me what you think about this poem, i just wrote this so i dont know if it sucks balls.....

my soul is untrained against all these emotions.

i feel love, i feel pain, i feel what you may never feel.

i try to go on and fight, but god its useless.

these feelings they're worthless, they're killing me.

as i succumb to all these feelings, i remain strong.

not for you and not for them, but for myself.

myself who is all i need to care about.

no one understands my beliefs, no one.

it seems that i am all alone with no one by my side.

i have nothing to live for, nothing at all but to see you die.

nothing at all but to see you die.... my love......

6/7/09

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  • Photo of xx_pin_xx xx_pin_xx
    Draftees
    xx_pin_xx
    Female, 19
    Toronto, CA
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    Pick me up from the gutter with a gentle kiss,Then rips out my heart to show me, how black it is!
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    Posted 2 years ago by xx_pin_xx

    in terms of structure, you could probably improve it more but the subject matter is extremly well done! it actualy explains how i feel! i really like it!! write more and more and more!! and my fave line is my soul is untrained against all these emotions.. ur poem has such a strong beginning

  • Photo of VermilionBallerina VermilionBallerina
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    VermilionBallerina
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    Fuck Steph!!! Corey is fucking mine Biatch!
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    Posted 2 years ago by VermilionBallerina

    im srry but i think it needs work

  • Photo of 6h6e6f 6h6e6f
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    6h6e6f
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    I was so lost in life, but I found myself again in death
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    Posted 2 years ago by 6h6e6f

    that is amazing. like ridiculously amazing! and i know exactly how you feel... or at least i think i picked up some good ideas from that... next time you say it sucks rethink that times 12

  • Photo of little_emo little_emo
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    little_emo
    Female, 17
    west elkton, OH
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    I need to put new pictures on here, the ones i have are ANCIENT!!
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    Posted 2 years ago by little_emo

    sounds kinda emo to