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my poem #3

June 8, 2009

im still working on my writing skills.

the religious

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NiB7514

they're walking there again.

to this place of peace and hope.

they give their soul to the lord.

instead of signing with a pen.

but to me its all a big joke.

condemning since they cut the cord.

who are the next condemned.

you, me or them.

the hopeless that never make it.

their life is a puzzle, in which i dont fit.

their mind is a stubborn one.

following a book, all work and no fun.

they take our money, every single bill.

to built a church, call it the littlte house on the hill.

working on their next plan to control.

to control and destroy, thats their goal.

getting involved where they should not.

wanting even more than they already got.

who are the next condemned.

you, me or them.

the hopefuls that make it.

their life is a puzzle, in which i dont fit.

their mind is a false one.

following a book, filled with imagination.

but in the end it does not matter.

they cant condemn, only the guy higher.

they'll pay for years of torture and hate.

they'll burn forever, an unavoidable fate.

to those unlike them i wish you well.

i wish you heaven and not hell.

who are the next condemned.

you, me or the world.

god help them, bring them to reality.

their life is a puzzle, in which i dont fit.

their mind is a corrupt one.

following a book, to which i dedicate.

 6/8/09

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    Posted 2 years ago by dethvault

    PRETTY GOOD, see you never know what you have hidden inside! Im currently putting guitar riffs to about ten of my lyrics!

  • Photo of xx_pin_xx xx_pin_xx
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    Pick me up from the gutter with a gentle kiss,Then rips out my heart to show me, how black it is!
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    Posted 2 years ago by xx_pin_xx

    omfg!! dude! ur so fucking good :D && my fave line is their life is a puzzle, in which i dont fit. SO fucking true! everything u said is true!! write more!! i like reading them!

  • Photo of 6h6e6f 6h6e6f
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    I was so lost in life, but I found myself again in death
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    Posted 2 years ago by 6h6e6f

    holy shit! that is amazing! wow im like speechless

  • Photo of little_emo little_emo
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    I need to put new pictures on here, the ones i have are ANCIENT!!
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    Posted 2 years ago by little_emo

    that's really good